Treatment#

Working document. The authoritative beat structure is outline.md. This file holds register notes for drafting.

Register Notes#

• Havoc Cut. Tone Skeleton and Havoc Register both apply in full.
• The mirrored-interdiction engine is the spine. The club's caltrops are Doug's crime with better materials, and every scene where the county looks at Doug should hurt a little because he earned the suspicion in HAVOC-01. He is innocent this time and nobody enjoys the irony less.
• Cadence is she/her, road name only. Competence first, menace through discipline, never through volume. She believes the flow numbers. Her worst moment is standing still while the van takes the bike and leaves Colby, and the prose does not editorialize it for her.
• Colby is proud of the bike before he is afraid of it. The injury scene plays sincere, no narrator jokes while he is on the ground. The comedy around it can breathe before and after, never during.
• The support van checks the bike before the kid in Ep 2 as foreshadowing, then takes the bike and leaves the kid in Ep 4 as the thesis.
• Peaches almost never swears. His register is cargo-strap fury and five-word verdicts. "Georgia" is the whole answer every time the nickname comes up, and the stories contradict each other on purpose.
• Doug's private threat model gets at least one aside (gangs finally arrived, thirty years late, in matching outfits). Keep it while he is doing something practical.
• Jerry's forearm scar is visible and the warranty-claim line is allowed exactly one encore if the room requests it.
• Barry stays a logging artifact. Four beats total, one per episode, per the outline. His fear in Ep 4 should be the first time he sounds less than certain about anything.
• Doug does not wear glasses (current visual canon). Do not repeat the HAVOC-01 reading-glasses beat.
• The narration may joke about the club. It may not joke about the pressure wave while a person is under it.